Don’t say a word.
Rust
-y
hinges of your perfectly shaped mouth
cry,
but I don’t want those teary words
escaping.
Hug me,
just don’t promise
that
everything will be alright.
I lied
when I said I want you
to tell me what I want to hear –
I don’t really want to listen
to the vacant efforts
that we made once.
Our love is a sad slow dance
in an empty house,
where we twirl each other
towards a cold standstill
of the end.
– Chatty Owl –
Desolate. Yet beautiful.
Thank you dear..
the last few lines – spoke to my memories – of my ex-husband.
The word “ex” says a lot…
gorgeous writing, it makes my heart weep, just a bit, *hugs*
Very beautiful š
Thanks dear.
well friend ~ Could the drop from loving another be any sweeter than a dancing winter-white whisper ?
Both so equally enchanting…
‘Our love is a sad slow dance
in an empty house…’
Your words are cold & heartbreaking, yet sear with your own brand of Owl heat…wonderfully done, as usual… š
Im so surprised so many people commented on these particular lines… I guess sometimes i hit he right note with my words, huh? š
Our love is a sad slow dance
in an empty house,
Simply perfect, erotic, sensual … You words have the texture of some blue velvet
I closed my eyes and imagined the blue velvet… What a soft and fuzzy thought…
Reblogged this on My Blog snuppy.
Beautiful.
Thank you.
Your welcomed. You have a seductive wa y with words
Really nice, Chatty. All of us deserve to have a happy dance in a plenty house. Tears are falling down more times than we need!
Cheers,
Rafael
Thats true, we cry too much over things that maybe dont deserve those tears! So glad to see you on my blog š
where we twirl each other
towards a cold standstill
~
Sent shivers down my spine.
Hopefully those shivers weren’t too cold! š
I sometimes don’t want to hear what I want to hear. Frail relationships do that to you. Nice job.
When I dont want to hear something, i scream so loud, it drowns it š
I agree with Paul. š„
No tears please! š
too sad to continue – love deserves better
Emotions always fly high.
Very emotional. Relationship corrosion.
What a perfect description. Corrosion. Thats exactly what it is.
This was absolutely beautiful, so much emotion in this and the last 5 lines……brilliant!!
So glad you liked it! I tried to portray the coldness of the dying love and im so happy that you thought those last lines were good enough to describe it! š
Yes, they reflected that feeling perfectly! Though a dying love is like a fire, you have to add fuel every so often to keep it going otherwise it will burn out!
loved it!
Thanks so much! š
So very, very nice!!!!!!!!
Thanks so much for stopping by!
Like the new look sweet. Love how you split rust -y more emphasis and impact. Those last 5 lines – I pictured waltzing and my mind went to Dr. Zhivagoā¦. beautiful x
Thanks! I guess i wanted something light and refreshing š
š you did well